Tuesday, November 10, 2015

Prompt on p. 70 - English 101

Leah Nieman
11/10/2015

I have recently wrote an essay on the topic of abortion. My stance on it was clear, but yet I tried not to be condemning. I took a stance on Pro-life, and abortion is a very controversial subject. The medium was print, and it was a short, 3-paragraph essay. I thought about my audience a lot while writing this paper, because it is such a heated topic. I wrote facts, but yet I tried to consider the other side also, but still kept to my beliefs. My paper was just a part, a small contribution, to the heated arguments going on about abortion today. I did not realize while writing my essay about my stance on abortion that I was joining a larger, ongoing conversation, but looking back I feel a sense of purpose about it, like my opinion actually matters. 

Prompt on p. 69 - English 101

Leah Nieman
11/10/15
Prompt on p. 69

This music video had a unique twist to it. It had Obama’s 2008 presidential campaign “Yes, We Can” speech delivered in a musical way, where people harmonized and put a tune to Barack’s impacting words. It was very powerful. Obama stated that “Yes, We Can” change our world, while singers chanted in the back a repetitive “Yes, We Can” in the background. The video was in grayscale, giving it a more solemn and sincere feeling. The singers in the beginning of the video were solemn, but then as the video went on, they seemed to get more and more positive and excited about the hope of changing our world. There was a variety of singers; Caucasian, African-American, and Indian, both men and female.  This gives the sense that this message is reaching every one of every race and presents a very non-biased view. At the end of the video it highlighted the word “hope” and slowly the “h” and the “p” faded away and were replaced with a “v” and a “t”, spelling the word “vote”. It was a very impacting video and I believe it influenced several people when it was time to head to the polls. 

Thursday, November 5, 2015

Collaborative Exercise - English 101

Ads our group chose: Leah Nieman, Isabela Burns, Holly Snider, Grade deMeurisse

How does the example you have chosen appeal, or not appeal? What words, sound, or images does it use to support its position? If you were to revise, what would you do? If you were to create another medium, how would it be different?



This ad thinks using high definition toothpaste will brighten smiles. It implies that white teeth are better. It appeals to people because they want a straight, white smile like the person shown in the picture. The words “up to 3x better whitening” supports its position of white teeth are better. The image of the girl with the bright smile persuades people to think she got that smile by using this toothpaste. There aren’t very many people out there who do not want or like bright white smiles, so that pretty much covers the audience perspective part of it. But if it were to be revised it could have more information and facts about the toothpaste. For example, including the whitening ingredients. Using the white background makes the words “ILLUMINATE YOUR SMILE” really pop out. The woman look really happy with her smile and most peoples over-all goal is to achieve happiness so by obtaining a beautiful smile you will be that much closer to being happy. Using this HD toothpaste makes people happy. If the medium were to be changed it should be put in a magazine, because magazines have large audiences and a lot of magazines discuss ways to better yourself and this ad does just that.

Illumipearls. Advertisement. Illuminate Your Smile, 2014. Web. 5 Nov. 2015. 

http://www.macleans.com.au/other-products.desktop.html

This is an advertisement for Naked brand juice. This advertisement explains that they ( The Naked company ) doesn’t have anything to hide, because their products are 100% all natural. They tell us that they use 100% juice. This advertisement makes us wonder if other brands do have something to hide?  The advertisement uses the color green as the main color for this ad. The color green is commonly associated with “natural” products. By using this color scheme, and using the phrase “100% juice”, the advertisement helps us see this product as healthy and natural. If I were to advise this advertisement for a different audience, possibly one that wasn’t so environmentally concerned, I would add information about the taste of this product. I could also mention something about the unusual color of the drink, making it unique. If I were to create this advertisement in another medium, I would change it to a commercial. I would still use the same color scheme, and use the idea of the product being all natural. I could also include music and videos that interest the viewer.

Naked. Advertisement. The Naked Truth. Jul. 2013, Web. 5 Nov 2015.


My group chose an advertisement on Coke. It takes a position on how you should have your young child drink coke soda, in order for them to have a “higher chance of gaining acceptance and ‘fitting in’ during those awkward pre-teen and teen years”. They make this claim saying that laboratory tests have proven this to be true.
                This advertisement does not appeal to us as a group. We all take the stance that young children, and especially babies would not benefit from sugary drinks. In the advertisement, the words it uses to support their claim of how babies would benefit later in adolescence from drinking Cola would be the title, “For a better start in life, start Cola earlier!” The images they use is a smiling mother and child, looking like they are on top of the world, giving the impression that they are happy with the Cola product and an open bottle of Cola in the left hand corner. If we were to revise this ad, we would have the baby be drinking the soda, and the mother happily watching. Another medium we would choose for this advertisement would not be on paper, but on the crates of Cola sodas. We think that this would be more effective in reaching to the people who are buying the product.

“For a better start in life…” hoaxes.org Museum of Hoaxes, 26 Apr. 2012. Web. 5 Nov. 2015. 


My group chose one of our three to four ads to be this e-card, satirically talking about tests in school. This ad is relating the amount of school work and the intensity of tests to how student's brains are beginning to shut down.

School's these days are beginning to set unrealistic standards with an emphasis on a general spectrum of a topic, and expect all kids to be inclined towards the subjects they're being tested on. The result is a mental shut down, and discouragement amongst the student body. For example, in Washington State, you must pass the Algebra 1 EOC (End of Course Exam) to graduate high school. If you don't pass it, you must retake it until you do pass it. This places unnecessary stress on students who may not be inclined towards math, however who may be prodigies in literature or artistic based subjects.
As a result of having to consistently retake, or simply waste time on these tests, you're missing important lectures and material covered in class, which you'll then be behind on as well, only making school harder, resulting in your brain shutting down not only after "we take tests" however simply from an overload of school work. 

If I work to change the medium of the advertisement, I would put it on a billboard with large bolded letters, and broadcast it outside of every building with any school affiliation to blast the message and make it loud and clear about the excess of unrealistic expectations regarding school work and testing in high schools. 

Citations: 

"The human brain is amazing. It functions 24/7 from the time we were born. . ." Cartoon.Pinterest. Your ecards. 


Exercise on p. 62

Taking Positions –

The Positions I Took
·         -I took position this morning while debating with my mom on which car I to take to school
·         -I had to take a position in American Government class today when being asked about where I stand on gun control
·         -I’ve had to take a position on the rules of my room in my house this week
·         -I’ve taken position while discussing OC’s Winter Quarter with my mom this week
·         -I took a position this week on an American Government paper discussing elite theory.

     The Positions Taken By the People around Me
·         -Like I said above, this morning my mother took a position on the matter of which car I would be driving this morning to school
·         -A friend of mine took a position on why he like a certain type of music, while I took a stance and disagreed with him
·         -My sister took a position while debating with her mom on her wedding planning earlier this week.

·         -My dad took a position last night while discussing why we should not own a dog to my little sister.

Position Ad

How does the example you have chosen appeal, or not appeal? What words, sound, or images does it use to support its position? If you were to revise, what would you do? If you were to create another medium, how would it be different?


My group chose an advertisement on Coke. It takes a position on how you should have your young child drink coke soda, in order for them to have a “higher chance of gaining acceptance and ‘fitting in’ during those awkward pre-teen and teen years”. They make this claim saying that laboratory tests have proven this to be true.

                This advertisement does not appeal to us as a group. We all take the stance that young children, and especially babies would not benefit from sugary drinks. In the advertisement, the words it uses to support their claim of how babies would benefit later in adolescence from drinking Cola would be the title, “For a better start in life, start Cola earlier!” The images they use is a smiling mother and child, looking like they are on top of the world, giving the impression that they are happy with the Cola product and an open bottle of Cola in the left hand corner. If we were to revise this ad, we would have the baby be drinking the soda, and the mother happily watching. Another medium we would choose for this advertisement would not be on paper, but on the crates of Cola sodas. We think that this would be more effective in reaching to the people who are buying the product. 

"For a better start in life…” hoaxes.org Museum of Hoaxes, 26 Apr. 2012. Web. 5 Nov. 2015. 

Wednesday, November 4, 2015

Taking Stock In Your Writing - Paper 2

Leah Nieman
English 101 – 5:30
Sonia Begert
11/4/2015

Taking Stock in Your Writing: Paper #2

1.        How did you go about analyzing the text? What methods did you use—and which ones were most helpful?

I analyzed my paper rhetorically. The methods I used were to: have a questions about the ads I was analyzing, figure out the claim each ad was making, support evidence to confirm the claim of the ad, choose two different ads that provided counter-arguments, point out how the ads are proving their points and the visuals they used to attract the audience, give quotes to prove the message the author was trying to prove, and how the ads appealed to the readers emotions. After going through all these methods, the ones I found that really helped me with my paper would be to have questions, use visuals to describe authors point, and how each ad appealed to the audience. Those three methods helped me provide enough information for my analysis.

2.       How did you go about drafting your essay?

I drafted my essay according to the English textbook, “Everyone’s an Author”. I first wrote out my thesis, found evidence for my paper, wrote down my sources, and drafted an opening and conclusion. After doing this I was able to start my paper with a plan in mind and where I would be going with it.

3.       How well did you organize your written analysis? What, if anything, could you do to make it easier to read?

I tried to organize it well. I included transitions and I feel like everything flowed. I think if I would redo something to make it easier to read it would be to summarize the first ad more.

4.       Did you provide sufficient evidence to support your analysis?

I think I did. My two sources came from the sites behind the ads that I looked up on Google Images. Also, some information I gave (Example: Smoking used to be associated with high class) came from my grandparents and their stories and also I saw this to be true through old television shows.

5.       What did you do especially well?

I don’t really know exactly what I did “especially well”. I guess the part of the paper I’m proud of would be where I describe the second ad, where the man is inserting cigarettes into a gun as if they were bullets. I feel like that area was written well and easy to understand.

6.       What could still be improved?

I think my conclusion. I tried to answer my questions that were in the beginning of my paper through my conclusion, but I think I could’ve been more clear.

7.       Did you use any visuals, and if so, what did they add? Could you have shown the same thing with words?

The visuals I used were the advertisements I was analyzing, if those count. I did write the paper though to be sufficient enough to be without the ad visuals. I feel that my description is very detailed and easy to follow and picture.

8.       How did other readers' responses influence your writing?

I got some great feedback. Their responses especially influenced my original title for the paper, showing me that how it conflicted with the rest of the paper.

9.       What would you do differently next time?

The thing I would do differently is pick both my ads from very credible sources. My second ad was from a media designer, not a company or campaign. I feel as though this dampens the impact of the ad slightly.

10.   Are you pleased with your analysis? What did it teach you about the text you analyzed? Did it make you want to study more works by the same writer or artist?

I am pleased with my analysis. I learned much while writing it. For instance, before the analysis I did not know about some events going on in the 1940s, but now I know about how they were learning about cancer, and how that was a period of time where much change was arising. I did peek my interest for that era of time, and I feel like I will be looking more into the 1940s.

11.   What are the transferrable skills you can take from this into other writing situations?


The questions on looking “critically at your rough draft” in “Everyone’s an Author” will absolutely transfer to other future papers of mine, because the questions were excellent. 

Paper 2 Ad Analysis - Final

Leah Nieman
English 101 – 5:30 pm – Ad Analysis Final
Sonia Begert
11/4/15

Smoking Advertisements: Then and Now

           A single advertisement has the ability to persuade and change the mindset of the people that view it. Most advertisements are based on facts, trying to convince the public to buy a company’s product or the opposite, but are these facts always reliable? Should we put our trust into them? In almost all ads, behind the facts are hidden impressions or meanings. In this essay I will be comparing two different smoking ads that are over half a century apart.
            The first ad is dated back to 1946 when it was published by the magazine Life, a popular magazine that would be read by millions. The advertisement is split in half, with a picture above, and an article below. The image that is featured above is a man in physicians clothing, posed relaxed and leisurely smoking a Camel cigarette, looking as if he is taking a break in between patients. The man has a kind look, almost grandfatherly, and gives you the impression that the people being treated by this physician are in good hands. The background is red, and there is a contrasting yellow text box next to the physician saying, “The doctor is a scientist, diplomat, and a friendly sympathetic human being all in one, no matter how long and hard his schedule." This quote leaves the readers with a feeling of safety, but that’s not all this quote is conveying. It is also silently but directly pointing out that the Camel cigarettes are to attribute to him staying “a friendly sympathetic human being” all throughout his “long and hard” schedule.
            Then to confirm this direct but silent persuasion towards Camel cigarettes, there is this large, shocking, and almost assumptive quote on the lower half of the advertisement in bold capitalized letters, “According to a recent Nationwide survey: More doctors smoke Camels than any other cigarette.” Not only does this statement shock the audience, but it also gives a sense of awe. An awe toward the product, and an awe that such important people like doctors would choose Camel to be their priority cigarette. The public then immediately start to affiliate health with smoking. This statement is then followed by a short article about the nationwide survey and also displays an open, alluring box of Camel cigarettes. At the bottom right corner there is also a woman, smoking, with a large capitol T across her mouth. Then by her it states, “Your T-zone will tell you…T for taste….T for throat,” signifying that Camel cigarettes will stimulate your “T-zone”. Then at the very bottom of the advertisement is the products key phrase, “Camels – Costlier Tobaccos.”
            During the time of this advertisement, studies had just announced that smoking could be linked with cancer. The public at this time were worried, and that is when Camel took action. Camel decided to start marketing the “More doctors smoke Camel” advertisements, hosting surveys at medical conventions. These advertisements were to re-assure the public, showing them that people affiliated with health were even smoking, and smoking a certain brand too! Through these ads Camel was very successful, and benefited from them enormously.
            The next ad was published in the year 2005 by a media designer under the name “Katego”. This ad went viral through the internet and social media, reaching countless people. In the ad there is a pitch black background, giving the feel of danger, darkness, and vulnerability. Then there are two hands and a gun. In one hand is the gun, and the gun has cigarettes lodged in the cartridge impersonating bullets. The other hand is inserting the cigarettes into the gun. This image is powerful, for when the audience sees the gun they associate it with harm or death. What causes the harm? In regular cases it would be bullets, but in this image instead of there being bullets, cigarettes are placed in their stead.
            As if the image wouldn’t be impacting enough, there is then a list of golden statements to the left of the gun, shining bright against the dark background. The statements include all sorts of negative effects of smoking, saying that smoking is the, “major cause of stroke” and how smoking, “may cause fatal heart attacks, gum disease, and cancer.” And underneath the list and gun, there are these profound words, “Smoking Kills…so why bother starting?”
This ad is to warn the public of the effects of smoking, trying to disintegrate all motive to start. The advertisement also has the ability to encourage the people who are trying to end smoking, reassuring them that by quitting their habit it will be to their best benefit. After viewing the ad, it leaves the audience a little shaken and with confirmation of the danger of smoking.
After looking at these two ads, it is very intriguing to see the difference and change in standards that had taken place in just the last half century. Prior to the 1950s and even extending farther, smoking was one of the most common habits of the public. Smoking was considered a delicacy, and even associated you with high class. At that time smoking was only promoted, even linking smoking to good health. It wasn’t until the mid-1940s that there was even the studies or technology to connect smoking with some of the health problems physicians started facing more and more often. When studies then came back positive towards smoking being related to health problems, there was mass fear. It was during this time when cigarette companies like Camel came up with advertisements reassuring the public of the health benefits of smoking, trying to keep their companies afloat.
Now in our modern day society smoking is looked upon as a harmful habit and something that you should try your best to quit practicing. Most advertisements linked with smoking are negative in our society today, like the one designed by “Katego”, for we now have the technology to know that there are really no healthful benefits of the habit. Smoking has now become rarer, and is now something people do to escape the world and feel happy, or what teenagers and young adults do to establish a feeling of independence. For the people who want to quit, there are now programs and group therapy, encouraging people that they are going down the right path.
Both these ads, though talking about the same subject, are giving two different extremes. One is promoting the health and commonality of smoking, and the other is revealing the harm and negativity of the habit. The public seeing the advertisement in the 1940’s had confidence that the people who were behind the publishing of the ad were telling the truth or implying the truth, and that smoking really was a healthy lifestyle. This is an example of how advertisements can be misleading, and maybe not fully reliable, just so they can convince the public to purchase their product. Now with the rise in technology and the information that we have obtained, we can now look back and learn from history and be able to confirm profound statements that are advertised, without being misled.

Works Cited:
“More Doctors Smoke Camels” Stanford School of Medicine Web. Nov. 3 2015.
Katego’s “Smoking Kills Ad” Deviant Art 2005 Web. Nov 3 2015.
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